Wednesday 25 June 2014

Writing

Room 4 were inspired by a piece of descriptive writing. It was written by Joshua in Room 8. Joshua wrote about a picture of a boy by a lake.
Here is our writing about two lions by a jeep which has a flat tyre.

There are two lions. The lions attacked the truck and popped the tyre. The people were very scared. The lions grabbed the new tyre. They went away but then they came back. The people felt very scared. They felt the truck moving and rattling and shaking. What is happening?

Cameron
                         Adventure Lions
I can see a red car. The lions are chasing the car. There is grass and wet in the background. I see the people in the red car. They are stuck on the road because they have a flat tyre.
I can hear the grass and the wet swaying in the breeze. I can also hear the hiss of the tyre.
I can feel the shaking of the car that the lions are making.
Chali

The lions popped the back tyre and the other lion popped the other tyre.
Stella
                  Lion Adventure
I can see two lions one is touching the car. It is scary for the people. I see the the people and the lions are sad. I can hear screaming.

Bella
              Lion Adventure
The lions are pushing the van because the tyre is flat. The other lion is looking at the flat wheel. The lions look like dogs. I can see grass in the background, it is long grass. I can hear the people screaming. I can hear the lions roaring.

Louis
The lions are chasing the bus. I can see the people in the bus. There is a flat tyre. I can hear the people yelling and I can hear the lions roaring.

Carey
The lions are attacking the bus. The bus has a flat tyre because the lions attacked it. The people are scared because they thought the lions were going to eat them. The bus is shaking. If I was there I would be even more scared than them. I hear the hissing of the tyre.

Hadlee
                        Lions
I can see the lion chasing the truck. One was looking at the tyre. I wonder why it’s looking? I am in the truck and I can hear the truck’s engine.

Ben
                Lion Adventure
The lions were chasing the jeep when the lion jumped up  and kissed the jeep. It was funny. Then we screamed, the lion was scratching the jeep. The lions saw the jeep shaking.

Evelyn
                    Adventure
I can see two lions chasing a truck. The tyres are flat. The paws must have flattened the tyres. I wonder what will happen next? I can hear lions scratching the window. It is scary for me.

Kaylee
The lions chased the car. Then the lions attacked the car. The tyre was going to pop. The jeep was not okay. The lion attacked it. It was scary for me.    

Corey
                   Adventure Lion
The lions are chasing the car. I can feel the car shaking.

Ella
             Lion Adventure
The lions are chasing the bus. It is funny.

Malachi
              Lions Adventure
I can see lions attacking the car and the people. I can see the flat tyre. The people can hear them.

Mia
              Lion Adventure
The lions are chasing the bus. One of the lions is attacking the bus. One of the lions is on the ground. I am scared. The lions are roaring.

Jack
                   Adventure
I can see two lions. One lion looks like it has eaten the tyre. It is a funny picture. There is a bus and the bus has a flat tyre. There are people in the bus. I am hearing the tyre going flat.

Renee

                  Lions
The lions are attacking the bus. One lion is attacking the back of the bus. The tyre is flat on the back. The lions are mad. I bet the lions live in Africa or Asia. I wonder if lions live in India? I hear the people screaming. I can also hear the lions scratching the back of the bus. They look like they are going to die.

Vinny 


The lions are chasing the bus. But then the lion went away. When the lion went away the people were all stuck. The bus is all stuck. All the lions came back.

Luca

              Lion Adventures
The car is stuck in the mud. The lions are pushing the car out of the mud and one of the lions is standing up. There are two lions in the picture. The lions have a fluffy mane and they have sharp claws with fluff around them. I can see trees in the picture to with green leaves. It feels like the car is shaking in the picture. It is really muddy. I can hear the claws scratching the car.

Talei

                 Jeep Chase
The lions are chasing the jeep. One of the lions popped the tyre and the other lion popped the spare tyre. It looks like the lion is pushing the jeep. There is a cliff behind them. The lions aren’t very nice. The road is muddy, that would be very frustrating. I can hear scraping from the lion at the back of the jeep. That is a crazy jeep chase. 
I feel happy and sad. I felt sad that the jeep got damaged and happy because I got pictures of lions.

Joel

The lions chased the bus. The lions are angry because the bus might run over them.

Zac